(1) Too wordy.
(2) Too strident.
(3) Too negative.
This is why having a blog is useful. Sometimes you can’t see in the moment just where your head is or has been at. But if you have a blog, voila, it’s all revealed to you when you actually take a moment to read what you’ve been writing.
There aren’t enough self-correctives in life. I’m happy to have this one, if sometimes embarrassed about how it looks after stretches like this.
Oh, and for anyone who doesn’t know me but is wondering, I don’t sound this infuriatingly pompous in real life. Well, usually. I hope.